Hi Keana! I'm so excited to read through your storybook! I'm getting Ancient India Mean Girls vibes, and I'm really loving it. I can imagine so many interesting stories and gossip that could come from the Myths we're learning about in this class. This idea is so fun, and I can't wait to read more from it. Great job!
Hi Keana, I read your introduction and am actually really interested in your stories. I agree with JDB that this definitely has a Mean Girls vibe! For my story this week, I actually wrote about Lakshmi, so I thought it was funny that you wrote about her older sister Alakshmi. A lot of times, Alakshmi is portrayed as an owl that hangs around Lakshmi to bring her bad luck! Maybe you could talk about that in your stories! I also love the sassy attitude you have given her. I think it is totally realistic, as she is supposed to be the opposite of Lakshmi, who is kind, beautiful, and brings good fortune. I hope you continue this attitude in your story writing because it is really entertaining and fun to read. It also is relatable to how people are now, so having a hateful big sister that despises her angel little sister is too funny, although, she hates her more than normal haha. I cannot wait to read more from you!
Hi Keana! I really like how you storybook is starting to come together! I read your introduction and was intrigued! I really like how it is written in first person. I felt like I was being sucked in because it was like the character was talking to me. I also love how your introduction and the title reminded me of Mean Girls! This definitely made it seem more modern and fun. I love the idea of using gossip as you central theme! I think this will make it more fun to read and even more fun to write for you.
Hi Keana! I saw the title "Burn Book of India" and I just had to read and it did not disappoint. The Introduction is great and already has me hooked and ready to read more. I am glad to see "by women, for women" since you are correct about most of the stories being "by men, for men". I definitely got a slight Mean Girls feeling but I can see that the characters of Sita, Manthara, and Mandodari are going to shine through. I am very excited to see the stories that you make over these women because I know they could have a lot to say. The tone through the introduction kept me intrigued and very excited to see what is next. I like the site as well and it also has me excited for what comes next and is formated very nicely. Overall you have me very excited to read what comes next in the storybook!
Hi Keana, I was really drawn to your title "Burn Book of India", and I was looking forward to reading your idea. I immediately got the Mean Girls vibe you were going for. I think your idea for the storybook is so creative, and I never seen that previously done before. I am excited to see how you will layout your burn book since in the movie, each person had it's own individual page and and just a brief statement for them. I am interested to see how descriptive you get about the gossip of Sita, Manthara, and Mandodari, and how their stories will become scandalous. I really like the image that you used for the banner. An idea could be photoshopping an image of the burn book so it has an Indian epic twist, maybe with the women that you are writing about. I look forward to keeping up with your burn book!
Keana, this is such a fun idea for your project! Your introduction is SO attention grabbing! I like that the information is coming from Alakshmi and she gives off a mischievous, giddy energy when talking about the burn book. The end line you used in the intro is so juicy, it makes me want more immediately. I am extremely excited to see what else you do with this and what kind of stories or information you include. I loved Mean Girls, and I think making a book "by women for women" is both empowering and titillating. I'm not sure what feedback or suggestions I can provide in this moment since there is just an introduction to work off. But, I will definitely check back with your project when it develops more. I imagine you'll be focusing on one person at a time, and I think having different pages dedicated to certain people or stories will make the project feel more like a journal or a "burn book". Good luck!
Hello Keana, First off I really like the look of your portfolio website. The picture you chose I feel like sets the vibe for your stories. I read your introduction and by that I am very intrigued to read the rest of your stories. I also love the idea of creating a burn book from the goddesses of Indian epics. As if maybe, this is the original burn book? Lol One thing I may suggest is maybe adding some specific details about your stories to intrigue the readers more. I also love the idea that you are making this a book for women by women and showing how powerful women are. Overall, I am super excited to continue reading your stories and good luck on the rest of the semester!
Hi Keana! I absolutely adore the concept behind your storybook. I love Mean Girls, so I am so excited to read your stories about the 3 women from the Ramayana. Also, I think it is really cool that you are taking your storybook from a previous class (I am assuming Mythology and Folklore) and continuing it for this class. I can tell that you really enjoyed writing the Burn Book of Olympus since you decided to write this second volume. I like your choice of having Alakshmi be the narrator/writer for the stories. She is overshadowed by Lakshmi, considered the bad sister to Lakshmi’s beauty and fortune, so I think it is really fitting to have a character with this type of negative personality already established as the narrator. I am a little confused though, is Alakshmi writing in the Burn Book and coming up with these stories or is she only the keeper and what other people think or say about these women appears in the book? I think you touched on that, but it could use a little more clarity. Also, one small thing I would like to note is that I do appreciate you explaining what a pandulekha is, but I think having the definition in parentheses in the introduction takes away from the story. I would recommend putting an asterisk by the word and having the definition in the footnote. Overall, fantastic job! Again, I am very excited to read your stories in this Burn Book and in your first volume too.
Hello Keana! I was so excited when this storybook popped up in the randomizer for my assignment. I am always up to watch a little "Mean Girls"... I mean who isn't?? Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your introduction and I think that you did a great job of explaining just what your story book will be about. One thing I do wonder about is are you going to almost incorporate the Mean Girl's personalities to the three woman from the epics. For example will you make one of the girls into Regina, one into Gretchen, and one into Karen (aka the plastics.) I think that if you do that it will really add some depth to your stories and help others connect your storybook to the movie you got inspiration from. I am so excited to read more of your stories and I look forward to reading all the Indian Epic Drama!
Hi Keana! I LOVE your storybook idea! I am one of the many that find Mean Girls entertaining, so I am very much looking forward to reading your future stories! I also love how you are focusing on the women of the Ramayana--so much of the epic focused on the men and just left the women to the wayside, so I am excited to see how you will bring them into the light. The one question I have from your introduction is why Alakshmi is living among mortals? Was she sent there to be punished, or just to fulfill a purpose? Beyond that, I am excited to read more. I think it might be helpful to maybe just expand more on who Alakshmi is so that we can have a better understanding of her motivations. Is she going to just be telling stories of the other characters, or will she be more involved? Besides that, great job so far!
Hello Keana! I am back and have read your most recent story of your story book! I thought you did an amazing job of portraying Sita's feelings while also using her feelings as part of a burn book drama written by Alakshmi. One thing i really liked about your Sita story is the commentary. All the name calling really pulls your theme together because it makes it more like the original burn book. I also really like that you acknowledge that the women have thoughts and feelings of their own. While reading the Epics I noticed that a lot of the stories would mention the women but would focus primarily on the men. Also, I did notice one small (itty bitty) typo, it is in your last paragraph and it says "I don't even know this women!" it should say "woman" instead. Other than that I thought that your story was great! It was very easy to read and understand and it was very entertaining! I look forward to more stories to come!
I really like your story. I think that you did a fantastic job at using the story of Sita's and put the modernized tones with it. I think that your story brought out the perspective of the woman's character in the story and that it quite amazing. Being able to create a story from a different perspective, but a different plot is so creative. I must say that hearing about Sita's thoughts and what she wanted to do give the story a little more realism to it and I really like it. Your comments at the begin and the end of the story is great as well. That gives your personal thoughts about the story. I love that you were able to connect with many readers. I think that the story is perfect, but I wonder what it would be like if you could add some more back and forth dialogue. I think that would make the story even better
Hello Keana! I really love the concept of your website! Since women’s emotions and feelings in the epics are often disregarded and overlooked, writing about their wicked thoughts is a clever and fantastic idea. I love how you write your first story on Sita because I think she lived such an awful life and it wouldn’t surprise me if she had those kinds of thoughts. The focus for this week deals with the images. I think you choose your images correctly and it’s relevant to your website topic! The only downside is that we cannot really see the Sita image page; if this could be fixed, it would be perfect. One thing that I could suggest in addition is to link directly to the website page for your image credit instead of the image page. Overall, your website was clear and easy to navigate. Thanks for your stories and have a good day!
Hello Keana, what a creative idea for getting the inside scoop on the thoughts and feelings of the women in these tales! As pointed out on your introduction, the original epics themselves are written “by men for men,” so to make a place for these women’s true feelings is much needed. I think it’s especially cathartic to give these characters a place for all of their pent-up frustrations to finally be let out. All too often, women like Sita are portrayed as gentle and perpetually kind, when there is no way that anyone could always be so optimisitc. I am also in love with the camaraderie between Lakshmana and Sita. The way they talk as close friends or siblings and keep each other abreast of Rama’s actions fits in perfectly with their roles as companions or helpers for Rama. It seems like there was one sentence that was left unfinished in your Author’s Note, but besides that, job well done!
Hey Keana! OH my gosh I relate to your story over boredom and sister so well. I remember making my siblings cry and trying to hush them before my parents heard and vice versa. What a genius kid! Learning to choose timeout so you could play and not get spanked! I wish I knew that when I was a kid! I really enjoyed the saving yourself theme like the turtle story. You did a great job of incorporating that!
I came back to read Sita's entry in the burn book, and it was thoroughly enjoyable! I love how you showed a different side of Sita in this story. Usually, Sita exudes peacefulness, grace, and strength. In this story, it shows the jealous and wavering side of her. Both sides, however, are still true to Sita in that she is loyal to Rama. I love how you also portrayed the dynamic between Sita and Lakshmana and how they would discuss what is best for Rama. The only thing is that you cut off a sentence in the Author's Note. When describing what you left out, you didn't actually describe it, but I think it was accidental. Other than that, it was a great burn book entry! I look forward to reading more from other women in the epics!
Hi Zille! I really liked what you have done in giving us a glimpse into the inner thoughts of the characters in the stories we have read. I have often thought that there are scenarios that I have read in which one or more of the characters must be feeling or thinking something that is not given enough time within the story. It's nice to see you giving these thoughts a voice! In your author's note you say that you "decided to leave out the part where Surpanakha." I think that there might be something missing from this sentence. The part where Surpanakha did what? I think that you do a good job of explaining the other choices that you make within the story, so I think that other than that one minor thing you author's note is really well done. I am exited to read more of your stories!
Hi Keana! I really loved reading your Storybook! The burn book idea is great because it allows you to show characters in a way they usually wouldn’t have the opportunity to act. I loved Sita’s entry because Sita is usually so calm, dignified, and bold, but you’ve really humanized her by showing her jealousy about Rama. I really love how the story is introduced and concluded by Alakshmi. It will help tie your stories together and continue the little frame that you’ve set up for your book. I absolutely love Alakshmi’s voice, too. I would take note that the third sentence in your author’s note seems to be incomplete. You say “the part where Surpanakha…” and then don’t finish the sentence. So I would take a look at that because it’s obvious that you thought a lot about how you wanted portray the characters in your story. You’ve done a great job and I’m excited to read more!
Hi Keana! I just firstly wanted to say I love the idea that this storybook is by women and for women -the appreciation and focus you gave to them is amazing! I like the idea that they each have a burn book with the “juicy details” of their life – makes it so much more personable! I like that they are “journal entries” that she has written – such a cool way of portraying Sita’s emotions! And yes of course I am interested! I really enjoyed the focus between just the women and not by creating a third party! For the “Manthara” story I enjoyed how you wrote in the perspective of why Manthara disliked Rama. I think with so much going on in the Ramayana – we don’t have much detail on why this is the case! I overall loved the offset of the font used and the layout played well with each other! I enjoyed the theme and look forward to reading more!
Hi Keana!
ReplyDeleteI'm so excited to read through your storybook! I'm getting Ancient India Mean Girls vibes, and I'm really loving it. I can imagine so many interesting stories and gossip that could come from the Myths we're learning about in this class. This idea is so fun, and I can't wait to read more from it. Great job!
Hi Keana,
ReplyDeleteI read your introduction and am actually really interested in your stories. I agree with JDB that this definitely has a Mean Girls vibe! For my story this week, I actually wrote about Lakshmi, so I thought it was funny that you wrote about her older sister Alakshmi. A lot of times, Alakshmi is portrayed as an owl that hangs around Lakshmi to bring her bad luck! Maybe you could talk about that in your stories! I also love the sassy attitude you have given her. I think it is totally realistic, as she is supposed to be the opposite of Lakshmi, who is kind, beautiful, and brings good fortune. I hope you continue this attitude in your story writing because it is really entertaining and fun to read. It also is relatable to how people are now, so having a hateful big sister that despises her angel little sister is too funny, although, she hates her more than normal haha. I cannot wait to read more from you!
Hi Keana!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you storybook is starting to come together! I read your introduction and was intrigued! I really like how it is written in first person. I felt like I was being sucked in because it was like the character was talking to me. I also love how your introduction and the title reminded me of Mean Girls! This definitely made it seem more modern and fun. I love the idea of using gossip as you central theme! I think this will make it more fun to read and even more fun to write for you.
Hi Keana! I saw the title "Burn Book of India" and I just had to read and it did not disappoint. The Introduction is great and already has me hooked and ready to read more. I am glad to see "by women, for women" since you are correct about most of the stories being "by men, for men". I definitely got a slight Mean Girls feeling but I can see that the characters of Sita, Manthara, and Mandodari are going to shine through. I am very excited to see the stories that you make over these women because I know they could have a lot to say. The tone through the introduction kept me intrigued and very excited to see what is next. I like the site as well and it also has me excited for what comes next and is formated very nicely. Overall you have me very excited to read what comes next in the storybook!
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ReplyDeleteI was really drawn to your title "Burn Book of India", and I was looking forward to reading your idea. I immediately got the Mean Girls vibe you were going for. I think your idea for the storybook is so creative, and I never seen that previously done before. I am excited to see how you will layout your burn book since in the movie, each person had it's own individual page and and just a brief statement for them. I am interested to see how descriptive you get about the gossip of Sita, Manthara, and Mandodari, and how their stories will become scandalous. I really like the image that you used for the banner. An idea could be photoshopping an image of the burn book so it has an Indian epic twist, maybe with the women that you are writing about. I look forward to keeping up with your burn book!
Keana, this is such a fun idea for your project! Your introduction is SO attention grabbing! I like that the information is coming from Alakshmi and she gives off a mischievous, giddy energy when talking about the burn book. The end line you used in the intro is so juicy, it makes me want more immediately. I am extremely excited to see what else you do with this and what kind of stories or information you include. I loved Mean Girls, and I think making a book "by women for women" is both empowering and titillating. I'm not sure what feedback or suggestions I can provide in this moment since there is just an introduction to work off. But, I will definitely check back with your project when it develops more. I imagine you'll be focusing on one person at a time, and I think having different pages dedicated to certain people or stories will make the project feel more like a journal or a "burn book". Good luck!
ReplyDeleteHello Keana, First off I really like the look of your portfolio website. The picture you chose I feel like sets the vibe for your stories. I read your introduction and by that I am very intrigued to read the rest of your stories. I also love the idea of creating a burn book from the goddesses of Indian epics. As if maybe, this is the original burn book? Lol One thing I may suggest is maybe adding some specific details about your stories to intrigue the readers more. I also love the idea that you are making this a book for women by women and showing how powerful women are. Overall, I am super excited to continue reading your stories and good luck on the rest of the semester!
ReplyDeleteHi Keana!
ReplyDeleteI absolutely adore the concept behind your storybook. I love Mean Girls, so I am so excited to read your stories about the 3 women from the Ramayana. Also, I think it is really cool that you are taking your storybook from a previous class (I am assuming Mythology and Folklore) and continuing it for this class. I can tell that you really enjoyed writing the Burn Book of Olympus since you decided to write this second volume. I like your choice of having Alakshmi be the narrator/writer for the stories. She is overshadowed by Lakshmi, considered the bad sister to Lakshmi’s beauty and fortune, so I think it is really fitting to have a character with this type of negative personality already established as the narrator. I am a little confused though, is Alakshmi writing in the Burn Book and coming up with these stories or is she only the keeper and what other people think or say about these women appears in the book? I think you touched on that, but it could use a little more clarity. Also, one small thing I would like to note is that I do appreciate you explaining what a pandulekha is, but I think having the definition in parentheses in the introduction takes away from the story. I would recommend putting an asterisk by the word and having the definition in the footnote. Overall, fantastic job! Again, I am very excited to read your stories in this Burn Book and in your first volume too.
Hello Keana!
ReplyDeleteI was so excited when this storybook popped up in the randomizer for my assignment. I am always up to watch a little "Mean Girls"... I mean who isn't??
Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your introduction and I think that you did a great job of explaining just what your story book will be about. One thing I do wonder about is are you going to almost incorporate the Mean Girl's personalities to the three woman from the epics. For example will you make one of the girls into Regina, one into Gretchen, and one into Karen (aka the plastics.) I think that if you do that it will really add some depth to your stories and help others connect your storybook to the movie you got inspiration from.
I am so excited to read more of your stories and I look forward to reading all the Indian Epic Drama!
Hi Keana! I LOVE your storybook idea! I am one of the many that find Mean Girls entertaining, so I am very much looking forward to reading your future stories! I also love how you are focusing on the women of the Ramayana--so much of the epic focused on the men and just left the women to the wayside, so I am excited to see how you will bring them into the light. The one question I have from your introduction is why Alakshmi is living among mortals? Was she sent there to be punished, or just to fulfill a purpose? Beyond that, I am excited to read more. I think it might be helpful to maybe just expand more on who Alakshmi is so that we can have a better understanding of her motivations. Is she going to just be telling stories of the other characters, or will she be more involved? Besides that, great job so far!
ReplyDeleteHello Keana!
ReplyDeleteI am back and have read your most recent story of your story book! I thought you did an amazing job of portraying Sita's feelings while also using her feelings as part of a burn book drama written by Alakshmi. One thing i really liked about your Sita story is the commentary. All the name calling really pulls your theme together because it makes it more like the original burn book. I also really like that you acknowledge that the women have thoughts and feelings of their own. While reading the Epics I noticed that a lot of the stories would mention the women but would focus primarily on the men. Also, I did notice one small (itty bitty) typo, it is in your last paragraph and it says "I don't even know this women!" it should say "woman" instead. Other than that I thought that your story was great! It was very easy to read and understand and it was very entertaining! I look forward to more stories to come!
Hi Keana!
ReplyDeleteI really like your story. I think that you did a fantastic job at using the story of Sita's and put the modernized tones with it. I think that your story brought out the perspective of the woman's character in the story and that it quite amazing. Being able to create a story from a different perspective, but a different plot is so creative. I must say that hearing about Sita's thoughts and what she wanted to do give the story a little more realism to it and I really like it. Your comments at the begin and the end of the story is great as well. That gives your personal thoughts about the story. I love that you were able to connect with many readers. I think that the story is perfect, but I wonder what it would be like if you could add some more back and forth dialogue. I think that would make the story even better
Hello Keana!
ReplyDeleteI really love the concept of your website! Since women’s emotions and feelings in the epics are often disregarded and overlooked, writing about their wicked thoughts is a clever and fantastic idea. I love how you write your first story on Sita because I think she lived such an awful life and it wouldn’t surprise me if she had those kinds of thoughts.
The focus for this week deals with the images. I think you choose your images correctly and it’s relevant to your website topic! The only downside is that we cannot really see the Sita image page; if this could be fixed, it would be perfect. One thing that I could suggest in addition is to link directly to the website page for your image credit instead of the image page.
Overall, your website was clear and easy to navigate.
Thanks for your stories and have a good day!
Hello Keana, what a creative idea for getting the inside scoop on the thoughts and feelings of the women in these tales! As pointed out on your introduction, the original epics themselves are written “by men for men,” so to make a place for these women’s true feelings is much needed. I think it’s especially cathartic to give these characters a place for all of their pent-up frustrations to finally be let out. All too often, women like Sita are portrayed as gentle and perpetually kind, when there is no way that anyone could always be so optimisitc. I am also in love with the camaraderie between Lakshmana and Sita. The way they talk as close friends or siblings and keep each other abreast of Rama’s actions fits in perfectly with their roles as companions or helpers for Rama. It seems like there was one sentence that was left unfinished in your Author’s Note, but besides that, job well done!
ReplyDeleteHey Keana!
ReplyDeleteOH my gosh I relate to your story over boredom and sister so well. I remember making my siblings cry and trying to hush them before my parents heard and vice versa. What a genius kid! Learning to choose timeout so you could play and not get spanked! I wish I knew that when I was a kid! I really enjoyed the saving yourself theme like the turtle story. You did a great job of incorporating that!
Hi Keana!
ReplyDeleteI came back to read Sita's entry in the burn book, and it was thoroughly enjoyable! I love how you showed a different side of Sita in this story. Usually, Sita exudes peacefulness, grace, and strength. In this story, it shows the jealous and wavering side of her. Both sides, however, are still true to Sita in that she is loyal to Rama. I love how you also portrayed the dynamic between Sita and Lakshmana and how they would discuss what is best for Rama. The only thing is that you cut off a sentence in the Author's Note. When describing what you left out, you didn't actually describe it, but I think it was accidental. Other than that, it was a great burn book entry! I look forward to reading more from other women in the epics!
Hi Zille! I really liked what you have done in giving us a glimpse into the inner thoughts of the characters in the stories we have read. I have often thought that there are scenarios that I have read in which one or more of the characters must be feeling or thinking something that is not given enough time within the story. It's nice to see you giving these thoughts a voice! In your author's note you say that you "decided to leave out the part where Surpanakha." I think that there might be something missing from this sentence. The part where Surpanakha did what? I think that you do a good job of explaining the other choices that you make within the story, so I think that other than that one minor thing you author's note is really well done. I am exited to read more of your stories!
ReplyDeleteHi Keana! I really loved reading your Storybook! The burn book idea is great because it allows you to show characters in a way they usually wouldn’t have the opportunity to act. I loved Sita’s entry because Sita is usually so calm, dignified, and bold, but you’ve really humanized her by showing her jealousy about Rama. I really love how the story is introduced and concluded by Alakshmi. It will help tie your stories together and continue the little frame that you’ve set up for your book. I absolutely love Alakshmi’s voice, too. I would take note that the third sentence in your author’s note seems to be incomplete. You say “the part where Surpanakha…” and then don’t finish the sentence. So I would take a look at that because it’s obvious that you thought a lot about how you wanted portray the characters in your story. You’ve done a great job and I’m excited to read more!
ReplyDeleteHi Keana! I just firstly wanted to say I love the idea that this storybook is by women and for women -the appreciation and focus you gave to them is amazing! I like the idea that they each have a burn book with the “juicy details” of their life – makes it so much more personable! I like that they are “journal entries” that she has written – such a cool way of portraying Sita’s emotions! And yes of course I am interested! I really enjoyed the focus between just the women and not by creating a third party! For the “Manthara” story I enjoyed how you wrote in the perspective of why Manthara disliked Rama. I think with so much going on in the Ramayana – we don’t have much detail on why this is the case! I overall loved the offset of the font used and the layout played well with each other! I enjoyed the theme and look forward to reading more!
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